I.Intro/thesis A. Mapplethorpe and his art B. Personal Account/other's reaction C. Controversy over Public Funding Thesis: Work should have been funded
II. Master Artist A. compare to other great masters 1.elements of artistry 2.other masterpieces could be interperated "pornographic" B. Artistic Breakthroughs 1.confidence of subject C. The majority of his work isn't controversial
III.Cultural Contribution A. contributes to free expression in extreme B.Documents/Takes segment of population "out of the closet" 1.although some individuals might use work as evidence to reinforce prejudices
IV.Challenges the viewer/thought provoking...important element in art A. Viewer has freedom to chose 1.General freedom/ and specifically , portions of original show sectioned off
V.Government is not an authority on art. A. Art world should judge art. B. Artists can't create if hands are tied.
VI. Conclusion: Mappllethorpe's work satisfies criteria of master artist according to art world, culturally significant and thought provoking and who is government to decide as long as people have freedom of choice. Mapplethorpe's legacy
I. Introduction a. how homosexuals are seen in society b. different types of art that portray a homosexual's image c. thesis II.Body Paragraph a. bible b. how the bible plays a factor c. causes d. explanation III.Body Paragraph a. a piece of art (not sure which one yet) b. description of the piece c. analysis and effects of piece IV.Body Paragraph a. another piece of art (most likely a song) b. lyrics towards homosexuals c. explanation d. analysis V.Conclusion a. thesis sum up b. thoughts from the body paragraphs c. sum up and possible solution
I might add another paragraph if i can think of another thing to write about and I'm not sure if my thesis works so let me know if I need a new one.
Ernest- I need to see your thesis reworded, and maybe focused more clearly. Could a clear subject like "We" be the subject instead complicated "art from past and present"? EX: We can clearly see how society's attitude toward homesexuals has changed through the art of the past and present.
But this is not really an argument, unless you add a judgment like "but that attitude has not changed enough." (And then you would prove that.)
I. Introduction A. Burma's reconciliation and the pictures of the people's dead body. B. Information. C. Explanation of the dead body (visually) Thesis: the picture of the monk's dead body is controversial that has both negative effects and positive effect.
II. Body Paragraph 1 A. the first negative effect of the picture (topic sentence) B. Explanation C Information and quote D. Sum up sentence
III. Body paragraph 2 A. the second negative effect of the picture (topic sentence) B. explanation C. Information D. Sum up sentence
IV. Body paragraph 3 A. the positive effect of the picture (topic sentence) B. explanation C. Information and quote D. Sum up sentence
V. Conclusion A. sum up thesis B. a little information from both 3 paragraphs C. I got stuck with my final solution. any suggestion ms. hibble? ^^
I. Intro a. Grabbing description of a shock artist’s work. b. General definition of ‘shock art’ 1. Purpose 2. use of free speech c. Thesis: Shock artist's use of extreme media and method often results in moral controversy but takes advantage of freedom of speech in order to satire our society and culture.
II. in depth moral controversy. a. Pictures of artist Zhu Yu eating cooked human fetus 1. Why was it controversial? 2. Was there a message (abortion)? Or just ‘shock’ factor? b. Marco Evaristti meatballs cooked in his own lipoed fat. 1. Cannibalism. "You are not a cannibal if you eat art," 2. Message about superficiality? c. Maurizio Cattelan's "The Ninth Hour" wax figure of pope John Paul II being hit by a meteor 1. Criticizing religion?
III. The big question. a. Are there deeper messages, or is it for the sake of shock alone? b. Both sides of the argument.
IV. Freedom of speech a. Does it allow this? b. Should it? 1. the effect of shock art: being offensive, or making people rethink a social issue, or even starting change. (examples)
V. conclusion a. Restate thesis b. Overview c. Final point.
Stef- the layout and thesis are great (though you might wnat to check the syntax of the thesis). As to the end of the conclusion, I don't think you need to solve anything. You can just make some kind of statement about how good art makes us think, and how sometimes even when we are repelled by images we see, that reaction can lead us to take positive action.... Does that help?
Sabrina- I love this topic. I would like to see you take a stand though: you can surely elaborate both sides but I should know what you think- or are you trying to say you agree with both sides? If so, make that idea clear in thesis.
Intro/Thesis: P1: Song qords quoted/What is hipHop music P2: Public Opionions of Hip Hop and Views of artist as well as people. What are the artists really trying to say in there work (good and bad) P3: How community/socitey is effected good and bad by this type of music art P4: Why this form of expressional art should not be labeled. P5: Closing with thesis and song quote P4:
I. Intro -Description of sexualized female in Japanese animation/art/anime. Gen Info and Ideas - Females in film - In toys, advertisement, and art - How it promotes sexualization in art - Does society promote it? - Is society affected? - Fine line between portrayal and pornographic images Thesis: Current day portrayal (or sexualization) in Japanese animation degrades women.
II. Elaboration - Different types of portrayal - Why are females portrayed in this way?
III. Pinpoint - Does society today promote this portrayal? Sexualization? (Japanese culture?) - How does it affect society today?
IV. Two sides - Is it ever okay? Why is it seen as okay today? - The fine-line
V. The effect - What it does to women - How it changes the gen expectation of women in modern-day film/art
VI. Conclusion - What can be done to solve this issue? - Make the ‘fine-line’ thicker.
Leonardo da Vinci: a scientist or an artist? Introduction: Grabber: L. da V.’ quota. Info: --Leonardo’s genius; --Renaissance; Thesis: The modern society is regarded Leonardo da Vinci primarily as an artist, but his contribution into science is no less significant.
P.1: --Art and science: contribution to the society in a whole. --Quota.
P.2: 1st opinion. -- Position L. da V. In a history of art; --His famous paintings; --Quota . P.3: 2nd opinion. --Leonardo is the most universal genius (different fields of science)/quota; --Contribution into science: inventions, scientific observations, discoveries in a human anatomy, mathematics;
P4: --Leonardo’s insights into science many centuries in advance of his time; --he did not have special technical education; --mostly of his works remained only on the paper, but: --significance of his investigations for the future generations; admiration by the modern scientists for some works (geology, anatomy).
Conclusion; --Thesis revision --Quota --L.da V.’s science was expressed through art; ---funnel: renaissance of science no less of art. oksana sema
Graffiti is an illegal behavior, and it should be censor.
1.Graffiti against the city laws. a.In most cases, people didn’t get the permit to draw at other’s wall. b.It destroys the city face.
2.Graffiti will spread the unhealthy informs and climate to the public. It will mislead the people. Ex. Unhealthy sex printings. Violent, Bloody draws.
3.There is a link about graffiti and crime. a.Graffiti cause gangs. b.Graffiti always occurs at night. It makes the street unsafe.
4.The readers almost are very young. It has bad effect at juniors.
1. Intro a) current trend b) example: Japanese culture c) why controversy? Thesis: Putting on makeups makes women look fabulous and destroy their confidence at the same time.
Body 2. Reasons of putting makeup a) others' insight esp. men example & quote b) ad encouragement example & quote
3. controversial difference between pre- and pro- makeups a) advantages of makeup b) disadvatages of makeup c) examples of recent cosmetic products
4. Bad effect of it a) waste of money b) lost self identity c) affect our next generation d) individual: reduce self esteen
5. Conclusion a) solution b) alert to people c) bring back to thesis statement
Introduction: Television is an important media for people. There are many advantages for television. However, there are many sex and violence program.
Thesis: There should be stricter censorship laws on network television that protect young people and our society from exposure to immoral behavior.
Body1: The advantage of television Body2: Children of any age can access TV programming easily because broadcast channels are available free over the air. Body3: Mostly the contents of the cartoons are violent and sex. Body4: The guidelines for what should be watched on late-night TV programs are not strict enough.
Conclusion: Today’s TV shows and cartoons have too much sexual and violent information. Therefore, we should have stricter censorship laws on network that protect young people and our society from exposure to immoral behavior.
Thesis: The media uses sex to promote sales,which has a negative effect on society.
I. Intro II. Sex within the media A. TV, subliminal sex, magazines, etc III. Sex promotes sales A. Statistics in sales, etc IV. Effects on society A. Youth B. Sexual statistics V. Conclusion
Thesis: In our society today the rare media exposure of advertisement campaigns such as the Dove campaign for real beauty is necessary to counter balance what the general public sees as a norm. Topic Sentence ONE: What and how the norm of a woman is portrayed in main stream media and how it effects society’s perception and standards of woman, re-emphasize need for campaign for real beauty EX: magazines, movies, actresses vs. everyday women Topic Sentence TWO: Why I believe society chooses to shun woman or have preference of unrealistic ideals of a woman and re-emphasize thesis EX: How woman are shun, attraction, marketing strategies Topic Sentence THREE would be a counterargument: Although some people may believe advertisement campaigns like Dove’s campaign for real beauty is unattractive, unmarketable or even unrealistic – in truth, most of society today in America looks like what is portrayed in those Ads. A woman’s average size in America is 16, the model’s in Dove’s ads are size 6-16 in contrast to most fashion magazines negative size 0s to-2. Or Although some people may believe marketing real beauty is a marketing strategy also, it is a small price to pay for counterbalancing all these images enforced into a young girl’s mind. Conclusion
Jaq- good plan. 2 suggestions for your draft: 1. Minimize "I believe/I think" statements. The whole paper represents your opinion already so those are not needed. Stronger and more forceful just to state that opinion as if it were fact. 2. Work with as much active voice as possible. Instead of "images portrayed by the media," make the media responsible by making the media the subject, then telling us what the media does.
I. Intro: Science as an art. II. Societies unacceptance of science (I,e Einstein, Galileo) III. The goal of science. IV. Why Science isn’t accepted V. Why we should accept science and what will happen if we don’t.
very short outline. Didn't have much time to work on it honestly. But thats basically the formatting im considering at the moment. A little unorganized but its a start i guess. =] go me
Thesis: Language is an art and a way to communicate with people. However, the role of language is a debatable subject nowadays. Some people do not accept other language as a real language (example, Black English). As a result, it leads to a major problem in our society.
Introduction: 1. How most people think of language. 2. define language in my perspective. 3. how language and its relationship to identity affect individuals and communities negatively.
Body: 1st: Like an art form or skill set, languages are passed down through generations and peers within the community of a person’s habitat. Although a language does not have a direct correlation to a certain ethnic group, the kind of language that a person learns definitely has an association to the person’s cultural background. Hence, that is often how a person is identified, and that individual identity also does influence how that person is perceived based on the type of vocabulary, tone, and accent he or she utilizes. (example, amy tan’s story)
2nd: Besides from using it as an ethnic label, language can also be used to empower or discriminate against a certain group of people. (example, Baldwin’s essay) (example, my own personal experiences)
3rd: Nevertheless, language is used for communication amongst people, which allows us to interchange our thoughts, knowledge, and feelings. From my point of view, language is a sign of human beings being civilized and making ourselves break away from existence as individuals.
Conclusion: 1. Restate thesis and my point of view. 2. What should we do to improve.
Sorry, Ms. Hibble. I didn’t carefully read the blog. I thought the thesis and the outline are both due today. I hope you do accept my outline and I also put the thesis altogether here. I do not know whether the thesis would work. I believe language is an art, which making ourselves break away from existence as individuals. I am arguing for why some people do not accept other language as a real language (ex. Ebonics) and how it affects people and the society. Hopefully, this will work. Thanks.
I. intro a. portraits, artistic photography b. sexuality, porn c.thesis: artistic nude photography and pornography often get confused with one another, when in actuality they are distinctly different II. nudity and its role in art a. body is beautiful b. society's fascination with body III. pornography a. not an art form b. sometimes distasteful c. doesn't focus on the human body in the same way IV. similarities between the two a. may show raw emotion, both entertainment purposes b. which one has a message? V. conclusion a. very distinct differences b. pay attention to the message
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I.Intro/thesis
A. Mapplethorpe and his art
B. Personal Account/other's reaction
C. Controversy over Public Funding
Thesis: Work should have been funded
II. Master Artist
A. compare to other great masters
1.elements of artistry
2.other masterpieces could be interperated "pornographic"
B. Artistic Breakthroughs
1.confidence of subject
C. The majority of his work isn't controversial
III.Cultural Contribution
A. contributes to free expression in extreme
B.Documents/Takes segment of population "out of the closet"
1.although some individuals might use work as evidence to reinforce prejudices
IV.Challenges the viewer/thought provoking...important element in art
A. Viewer has freedom to chose
1.General freedom/ and specifically , portions of original show sectioned off
V.Government is not an authority on art.
A. Art world should judge art.
B. Artists can't create if hands are tied.
VI. Conclusion: Mappllethorpe's work satisfies criteria of master artist according to art world, culturally significant and thought provoking and who is government to decide as long as people have freedom of choice. Mapplethorpe's legacy
I. Introduction
a. how homosexuals are seen in society
b. different types of art that portray a homosexual's image
c. thesis
II.Body Paragraph
a. bible
b. how the bible plays a factor
c. causes
d. explanation
III.Body Paragraph
a. a piece of art (not sure which one yet)
b. description of the piece
c. analysis and effects of piece
IV.Body Paragraph
a. another piece of art (most likely a song)
b. lyrics towards homosexuals
c. explanation
d. analysis
V.Conclusion
a. thesis sum up
b. thoughts from the body paragraphs
c. sum up and possible solution
I might add another paragraph if i can think of another thing to write about and I'm not sure if my thesis works so let me know if I need a new one.
Ernest Tong
good layout- I see you addressing both sides in a clear lay out, Tanya
Ernest- I need to see your thesis reworded, and maybe focused more clearly. Could a clear subject like "We" be the subject instead complicated "art from past and present"?
EX: We can clearly see how society's attitude toward homesexuals has changed through the art of the past and present.
But this is not really an argument, unless you add a judgment like "but that attitude has not changed enough." (And then you would prove that.)
I. Introduction
A. Burma's reconciliation and the pictures of the people's dead body.
B. Information.
C. Explanation of the dead body (visually)
Thesis: the picture of the monk's dead body is controversial that has both negative effects and positive effect.
II. Body Paragraph 1
A. the first negative effect of the picture (topic sentence)
B. Explanation
C Information and quote
D. Sum up sentence
III. Body paragraph 2
A. the second negative effect of the picture (topic sentence)
B. explanation
C. Information
D. Sum up sentence
IV. Body paragraph 3
A. the positive effect of the picture (topic sentence)
B. explanation
C. Information and quote
D. Sum up sentence
V. Conclusion
A. sum up thesis
B. a little information from both 3 paragraphs
C. I got stuck with my final solution. any suggestion ms. hibble? ^^
I. Intro
a. Grabbing description of a shock artist’s work.
b. General definition of ‘shock art’
1. Purpose
2. use of free speech
c. Thesis: Shock artist's use of extreme media and method often results in moral controversy but takes advantage of freedom of speech in order to satire our society and culture.
II. in depth moral controversy.
a. Pictures of artist Zhu Yu eating cooked human fetus
1. Why was it controversial?
2. Was there a message (abortion)? Or just ‘shock’ factor?
b. Marco Evaristti meatballs cooked in his own lipoed fat.
1. Cannibalism. "You are not a cannibal if you eat art,"
2. Message about superficiality?
c. Maurizio Cattelan's "The Ninth Hour" wax figure of pope John Paul II being hit by a meteor
1. Criticizing religion?
III. The big question.
a. Are there deeper messages, or is it for the sake of shock alone?
b. Both sides of the argument.
IV. Freedom of speech
a. Does it allow this?
b. Should it?
1. the effect of shock art: being offensive, or making people rethink a social issue, or even starting change. (examples)
V. conclusion
a. Restate thesis
b. Overview
c. Final point.
P1-INTRO
P2-China Human Rights
P3-Tianamen Square
P4- Aftermath/ Tianmen Square
P5- Conclusion.
Stef- the layout and thesis are great (though you might wnat to check the syntax of the thesis). As to the end of the conclusion, I don't think you need to solve anything. You can just make some kind of statement about how good art makes us think, and how sometimes even when we are repelled by images we see, that reaction can lead us to take positive action.... Does that help?
Sabrina- I love this topic. I would like to see you take a stand though: you can surely elaborate both sides but I should know what you think- or are you trying to say you agree with both sides? If so, make that idea clear in thesis.
katrina: what is your thesis?
Intro/Thesis:
P1: Song qords quoted/What is hipHop music
P2: Public Opionions of Hip Hop and Views of artist as well as people. What are the artists really trying to say in there work (good and bad)
P3: How community/socitey is effected good and bad by this type of music art
P4: Why this form of expressional art should not be labeled.
P5: Closing with thesis and song quote
P4:
Irela- looks good. A solid plan!
I. Intro
-Description of sexualized female in Japanese animation/art/anime.
Gen Info and Ideas
- Females in film
- In toys, advertisement, and art
- How it promotes sexualization in art
- Does society promote it?
- Is society affected?
- Fine line between portrayal and pornographic images
Thesis: Current day portrayal (or sexualization) in Japanese animation degrades women.
II. Elaboration
- Different types of portrayal
- Why are females portrayed in this way?
III. Pinpoint
- Does society today promote this portrayal? Sexualization? (Japanese culture?)
- How does it affect society today?
IV. Two sides
- Is it ever okay? Why is it seen as okay today?
- The fine-line
V. The effect
- What it does to women
- How it changes the gen expectation of women in modern-day film/art
VI. Conclusion
- What can be done to solve this issue?
- Make the ‘fine-line’ thicker.
Jorge Lozada Jr.
Leonardo da Vinci: a scientist or an artist?
Introduction:
Grabber: L. da V.’ quota.
Info: --Leonardo’s genius;
--Renaissance;
Thesis: The modern society is regarded Leonardo da Vinci primarily as an artist, but his contribution into science is no less significant.
P.1:
--Art and science: contribution to the society in a whole.
--Quota.
P.2: 1st opinion.
-- Position L. da V. In a history of art;
--His famous paintings;
--Quota
.
P.3: 2nd opinion.
--Leonardo is the most universal genius (different fields of science)/quota;
--Contribution into science: inventions, scientific observations, discoveries in a human anatomy, mathematics;
P4:
--Leonardo’s insights into science many centuries in advance of his time;
--he did not have special technical education;
--mostly of his works remained only on the paper, but:
--significance of his investigations for the future generations; admiration by the modern scientists for some works (geology, anatomy).
Conclusion;
--Thesis revision
--Quota
--L.da V.’s science was expressed through art;
---funnel: renaissance of science no less of art.
oksana sema
Oksana and Jorge- both look strong and very interesting
Graffiti is an illegal behavior, and it should be censor.
1.Graffiti against the city laws.
a.In most cases, people didn’t get the permit to draw at other’s wall.
b.It destroys the city face.
2.Graffiti will spread the unhealthy informs and climate to the public. It will mislead the people.
Ex. Unhealthy sex printings. Violent, Bloody draws.
3.There is a link about graffiti and crime.
a.Graffiti cause gangs.
b.Graffiti always occurs at night. It makes the street unsafe.
4.The readers almost are very young. It has bad effect at juniors.
1. Intro
a) current trend
b) example: Japanese culture
c) why controversy?
Thesis: Putting on makeups makes women look fabulous and destroy their confidence at the same time.
Body
2. Reasons of putting makeup
a) others' insight esp. men
example & quote
b) ad encouragement
example & quote
3. controversial difference between pre- and pro- makeups
a) advantages of makeup
b) disadvatages of makeup
c) examples of recent cosmetic products
4. Bad effect of it
a) waste of money
b) lost self identity
c) affect our next generation
d) individual: reduce self esteen
5. Conclusion
a) solution
b) alert to people
c) bring back to thesis statement
Introduction: Television is an important media for people. There are many advantages for television. However, there are many sex and violence program.
Thesis: There should be stricter censorship laws on network television that protect young people and our society from exposure to immoral behavior.
Body1: The advantage of television
Body2: Children of any age can access TV programming easily because broadcast channels are available free over the air.
Body3: Mostly the contents of the cartoons are violent and sex.
Body4: The guidelines for what should be watched on late-night TV programs are not strict enough.
Conclusion: Today’s TV shows and cartoons have too much sexual and violent information. Therefore, we should have stricter censorship laws on network that protect young people and our society from exposure to immoral behavior.
Thesis: The media uses sex to promote sales,which has a negative effect on society.
I. Intro
II. Sex within the media
A. TV, subliminal sex, magazines, etc
III. Sex promotes sales
A. Statistics in sales, etc
IV. Effects on society
A. Youth
B. Sexual statistics
V. Conclusion
Kelly, Mary Grace, Zhou and Wai: you all seem to have a good plan and a controversial topic, so go for it.
Thesis: In our society today the rare media exposure of advertisement campaigns such as the Dove campaign for real beauty is necessary to counter balance what the general public sees as a norm.
Topic Sentence ONE: What and how the norm of a woman is portrayed in main stream media and how it effects society’s perception and standards of woman, re-emphasize need for campaign for real beauty
EX: magazines, movies, actresses vs. everyday women
Topic Sentence TWO: Why I believe society chooses to shun woman or have preference of unrealistic ideals of a woman and re-emphasize thesis
EX: How woman are shun, attraction, marketing strategies
Topic Sentence THREE would be a counterargument: Although some people may believe advertisement campaigns like Dove’s campaign for real beauty is unattractive, unmarketable or even unrealistic – in truth, most of society today in America looks like what is portrayed in those Ads. A woman’s average size in America is 16, the model’s in Dove’s ads are size 6-16 in contrast to most fashion magazines negative size 0s to-2.
Or Although some people may believe marketing real beauty is a marketing strategy also, it is a small price to pay for counterbalancing all these images enforced into a young girl’s mind.
Conclusion
JACQUELINE THANH**
Jaq- good plan. 2 suggestions for your draft:
1. Minimize "I believe/I think" statements. The whole paper represents your opinion already so those are not needed. Stronger and more forceful just to state that opinion as if it were fact.
2. Work with as much active voice as possible. Instead of "images portrayed by the media," make the media responsible by making the media the subject, then telling us what the media does.
I. Intro: Science as an art.
II. Societies unacceptance of science (I,e Einstein, Galileo)
III. The goal of science.
IV. Why Science isn’t accepted
V. Why we should accept science and what will happen if we don’t.
very short outline. Didn't have much time to work on it honestly. But thats basically the formatting im considering at the moment. A little unorganized but its a start i guess. =] go me
Tyler- that works. All I ask is a plan sort of kind of, which you have. Interesting thesis too.
Thesis: Language is an art and a way to communicate with people. However, the role of language is a debatable subject nowadays. Some people do not accept other language as a real language (example, Black English). As a result, it leads to a major problem in our society.
Introduction:
1. How most people think of language.
2. define language in my perspective.
3. how language and its relationship to identity affect individuals and communities negatively.
Body:
1st: Like an art form or skill set, languages are passed down through generations and peers within the community of a person’s habitat. Although a language does not have a direct correlation to a certain ethnic group, the kind of language that a person learns definitely has an association to the person’s cultural background. Hence, that is often how a person is identified, and that individual identity also does influence how that person is perceived based on the type of vocabulary, tone, and accent he or she utilizes.
(example, amy tan’s story)
2nd: Besides from using it as an ethnic label, language can also be used to empower or discriminate against a certain group of people.
(example, Baldwin’s essay)
(example, my own personal experiences)
3rd: Nevertheless, language is used for communication amongst people, which allows us to interchange our thoughts, knowledge, and feelings. From my point of view, language is a sign of human beings being civilized and making ourselves break away from existence as individuals.
Conclusion:
1. Restate thesis and my point of view.
2. What should we do to improve.
Sorry, Ms. Hibble. I didn’t carefully read the blog. I thought the thesis and the outline are both due today. I hope you do accept my outline and I also put the thesis altogether here. I do not know whether the thesis would work.
I believe language is an art, which making ourselves break away from existence as individuals. I am arguing for why some people do not accept other language as a real language (ex. Ebonics) and how it affects people and the society. Hopefully, this will work. Thanks.
I. intro
a. portraits, artistic photography
b. sexuality, porn
c.thesis: artistic nude photography and pornography often get confused with one another, when in actuality they are distinctly different
II. nudity and its role in art
a. body is beautiful
b. society's fascination with body
III. pornography
a. not an art form
b. sometimes distasteful
c. doesn't focus on the human body in the same way
IV. similarities between the two
a. may show raw emotion, both entertainment purposes
b. which one has a message?
V. conclusion
a. very distinct differences
b. pay attention to the message
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