Art seems to be a subject which causes a lot of controversy in our world. It’s strange for me to think that people can spread such strong emotions through a song, poem, or painting. Long gone are the grammar school days when making a paper cut out turkey was considered art. Art is more responsible, art has power. Art can be used for good, and art can be used for bad. What is the influence of art on modern day society? If in songs a girl is referred to as a “bitch” or a “hoe” does that have an actual affect on society? Everyone has heard of art as an inspiration, writers look to other works to create new ones, people look to poetry to release emotions, and people use movies and plays to pay tribute to people. The real question comes in when we look at how art can bring negative things into the game such as racism or sexism. Art has the power to heal, but does it also have the power to inflict pain? In my own personal opinion I would say yes. I remember growing up going to a school up the street from Brandeis, a Jewish grammar school. One day arriving to school we witnessed swastikas drawn on the cement in front of their school. Those kids had to suck it up for the day and walk passed the hate into the school. It’s hard to imagine that art can cause so many great things and at the same time inflict so much pain.
Thesis: Through analyzing music from different genres, hip-hop, pop, and oldies, the listener can decipher how music is both positive and negative to our society.
The racist and demeaning portrayal of Hispanic immigrants advertised on television is filled with negative and destructive stereotypes that exploit the Mexican American people; they are depicted as poor, ignorant, and illegal citizens, and so the public misconception seems to be that all Mexican’s must have jobs as: gardeners, house cleaners, or fruit pickers. The fast food chain Taco Bell has used various racial slogans within their myriad of television campaigns. One such particular and popular ad was “Run for the Border.” The other commercial featured a Mexican Chihuahua saying “Yo Quiero Taco Bell.” These fictitious and offensive images should be censored and abolished because it is biased and it oppresses the Mexican American public by deeming them inferior and uneducated. I feel that a change has to occur within the minds of the people who are watching these insulting television ads, the mass public gets brainwashed by these negative images, and so the prejudice and racism, and classism continues with turbulent repercussions of on going segregation and hatred, Future society should be required to have a voice in banning racial propaganda from television and the advertisement world.
Thesis: The media and advertising world is to blame for the racist and twisted outlook on how Americans perceive Mexican immigrants in the U.S., legal or illegal. A change should be made, so that Hispanic groups are protected and not heckled and belittled, and that more positive images of their culture are portrayed within advertisements and the mass media.
I. intro a. introduce topic; physical appearances b. thesis; negative consequences of one's physical appearances amongst Others And themselves. II. 1st body paragraph a. superficiality and standards in general/society b. pie c. inc. at least 1 quote to support idea III. 2nd body paragraph a. professionalism and expectations of personal appearances b. pie c. inc at least 1 quote to support idea IV. 3rd body paragraph a. the limitations and restrictions on oneself due to negative views and the need to be accepted b. pie c. inc at least 1 quote V. conclusion a. briefly restate thesis or main ideas b. sum it up + last thoughts
umm..I wasn't really sure how specific or broad you wanted the outline to be but I can make it more specific if necessary. I was also wondering... do we do a partner email exchange through this blog for the review? or is that something we're going to do on monday?
I. Introduction -general idea of prejudice -example of prejudice -thesis: negative consequences of judging people on their physical appearance.
II. Body paragraph 1 -topic sentence -1st consequence: less opportunity for certain groups to express their ideas and thoughts caused by prejudice. -example of the consequence -sum up sentences
III. Body paragraph 2 -topic sentence -2nd consequence: people tend to withdraw themselves from certain groups because they are paranoid of certain groups. -example of the consequence -sum up sentences
IV. Body paragraph 3 -topic sentence -3rd consequence: certain people who are being prejudiced by others will feel depressed and loose their confidence which will at worst result in suicidal. -sum up sentences V. Conclusion -thesis(judging people on their physical appearance is not acceptable) -support thesis -sum up sentence
Thesis: Our society has learned to base others solely off the way they appear; although this may serve as a window to a person’s personality, it also divides our society by permanently placing us into isolated stereotype groups. [Edited; ?]
Intro Grabby: [Begin with a crazy fact] Intro’s Main Idea: [Include thesis in someway] and introduce small ideas that support thesis branching from… a) What is stereotyping? Why do people do it? Why does current day society do it? b) Positives/Negatives of stereotyping. c) How does it divide us? d) What will this division lead to?
1st Body: Point… Thoroughly explain “a)” questions. - Supporting detail, real definitions. Info. - Explanation. 2nd Body: Point… Focus on positive/negative effects. “b)”. - Introduce both positive and negative effects. Concrete details. - Explanation/commentary. 3rd Body: Point… Elaborate on how we become divided. “c)” - Details. Theory. People are pushed farther apart into groups. - How fear and hate plays in. Explanation. 4th Body: Point… Division will lead to isolation. “d)” - Perhaps describe a divided world. - An undivided world (conclusion maybe). - Explanation. Conclusion: Focus on the point of how, although we do stereotype, and although stereotyping may never truly disappear from society, we as humans should work towards our unification and the awareness of these stereotypes. (Maybe I can make this concept into another body paragraph instead, and my conclusion can be based on exactly ‘how’ this can be achieved. Or I can combine… still deciding.)
Women have been adversely affected by images in advertising. We can find healing through the same medium (the photgraphic image), as we explore and celebrate the diversity of women's beauty.
I. Intro . introduce art work of Isis
II. Problem of stereo-types in mainstream media A. Celebrated body types through history in art fashion and society and effects . some profession affected . Brown vs Topeka Board of Education . scene from movie "Knocked UP"
B. Examples of adverse effects .children who judge their bodies . increases in eating disorders/ plastic surgery/ preocupation with youth . Model in Barcelona who died . comments made by men who judge women . difference bewteen healthy body weight and obsessing about body image and concurrence of obesity in America
C. Isis' personal account/ and stories of her subjects . The Beauty Myth
III. Recent changes in media/ what is beauty? A.Experience of Isis' subjects durring and after photo shoot .internal beauty vs. external
B. emergence of the "plus model" .Willhelmina Plus division/ interview? .Angelica Morton, plus model/interview? . C. other changes in Media .Dove Ad campaign ."Real" people in ADs .Body weight minimum for Models in Fasion shows
IV. Looking forward/ What I'd like to see. . Conclusion
1. Art as a form of prejudice (intro) A. types of art a. paintings b. songs c. TV shows B. effects of art a. expressions in art (words, images, etc) C. thesis a. various forms of art don’t allow world peace 2. body paragraph A. songs with derogatory terms degrade others B. words not only degrade themselves, but others too a. causes a continuation of using these terms b. creates possible conflicts between people C. elaboration 3. body paragraph A. comedians and movies a. makes fun of different races of their own as well as others B. although the jokes may be funny, they hurt other people’s feelings and their own personal image C. elaboration 4. body paragraph A. poems with racial terms creates stronger racial opinions B. causes racists to rally behind their opinions and thoughts C. elaboration 5. conclusion A. various forms of art create negativity B. how the negativity creates conflict and affects world peace C. restate thesis D. final statement
Jacqueline Thanh Option 2 – Writing as a solution – outline Thesis: Peace can be obtained by any individual through the empowerment of the art of writing. Introduction – Grabber: Quote “Pen is mightier than the sword”… a sentence to emphasize the importance of writing perhaps which should be leading into three main ideas. Also how writing is often undermined of it’s power to make changes. 1st main idea) Writing is a sanctuary for truth and history. Like years of war, violence, or history gone untold but solved with writing. 2nd main idea) Writing unites. Bridging gaps between people of different walks of life, generations, etc… 3rd main idea) Writing can be the ultimate weapon to attain world peace for any individual that chooses to do so. Fit in thesis somewhere here. 1st main idea) Writing is a sanctuary for truth and history. Like years of war, violence, or history gone untold but solved with writing. Use examples of books published like Diary of Anne Frank, Rape of Nan King, etc. Will delve into Asian American history perhaps (I think you said it has to be race related right?) and make examples out of history in correlation to writing preserving history as a solution. 2nd main idea) Writing unites. Bridging gaps between people of different walks of life, generations, etc… I will elaborate on this with examples of author Adeline Yen Mah, my experience meeting her and use a interview perhaps of how she pieced together two worlds into one in her novels Falling Leaves and Chinese Cinderella. 3rd main idea) Writing can be the ultimate weapon to attain world peace for any individual that chooses to do so. Use Iris Chang as an example, before her death her research and books published to not only record down history in it’s entirety but to attain peace for an entire generation gone silenced in the silent holocaust. Also include my experience meeting her on several occasions, the annual Rape of Nan King remembrance and group for reparations and recognition from Japanese and US government perhaps. Conclusion: Reiterate thesis while incorporating my reflections on my own feelings about writing and how it has empowered me and individuals around me to change the world in some small unique but of course significant way.
Essay 1 Outline I. Intro a. Physical appearance, Different ways you can alter your appearance b. Plays a rold in daily life [Family, friends, workplace] c. thesis II. Physical appearance as a negative a. First impressions are formed based on physical appearance, not personality [?] b. No chance to look in depth, judged on the surface c. Restricting open-mindedness III. Being held back by prejudice a. Relationships [friends & otherwise] b. Workplace [jobs/interviews] IV. Personal experience a. Private school [unforms] V. Conclusion a. Sum up everything b. “Society stresses appearance, no chance for showing true selves”
Title: Personal appearance, the business world and discrimination.
1. Topic paragraph: Personal appearance stereotypes can make you or break you in business world 1.1 Effects on small business 1.2 Effect on big business 1.3 For the good all this must change
2. What are some of the stereotypes encountered? 2.1 Positive images 2.2 Negative stereotypes 2.3 Physical attributes (race, sex, age, height, weight, etc.)
3. Reasons for Stereotypes 3.1 Jealously / envy 3.2 Differences in belief 3.3 Misunderstanding of customs
4. Specific effects of stereotypes 4.1 The employee 4.2 The client 4.3 The customer 4.4 The employer
5. Conclusion: 5.1 Opinion on how the negative effects spread from business to everywhere. 5.2 What we can do to stop it. 5.3 Closing line: It is our duty to end the damages of discrimination and work together.
Intro: (Begin with a good quote for)Music is one of the most important elements of human life. Thesis: Music can have a variety of influences in the society, both positive and negative.
1st body paragraph: Positive effects- Music has been proven to have a huge positive effect on people's thought and habit. -Different kinds of music can affect people’s mood.(Find some examples for thought and habit) -another advantage of music is music therapy.
2nd body paragraph: Negative effects 1- Many youths get easily influenced during adolescence. Highly influential music can create negative effects on teenagers. How the music influence youths? What are the negative effects? (Find some examples for how the music influence youths, and explain.)
3rd body paragraph: Negative effects 2- The inappropriate lyrics may hurt some homosexuals and women. How the music influence homosexuals and women? (Find some examples for how the music influences homosexuals and women, and explain why.)
Conclusion: Sum up the main point and maybe I can find some solution for those negative effects. -classify or censor music
Purpose: To show how being prejudice can produce false beliefs. Thesis: Due to our society hqving individuals who are prejudice, leads others to falsely misjudge and label others, such as stereotyping. Audience: Current college students and Miss “H”.
Stereotyping in our society I. Intro: Stereotyping in society A. What is stereotyping B. How stereotyping is a form of discrimination II. Examples of what is stereotyping 1. How people misjudge you: C. Clothing D. Background/Past history E. Race III. If it’s one fault that we are stereotypical? 1. Whether it’s there fault or not (how they were raised) F. Upbringing G. environment H. schools IV. How does being stereotyped effect us I. Unhealthy thinking J. Can lead to violence K. Can distract us from being who we are. V. Solution: How can we stop discriminating one another? L. By unlearning what we one knew M. Give personal example
I.Introduction Thesis: Through analyzing music from different genres; hip-hop, pop, and oldies, the listener can decipher how music is both positive and negative to our society. II. Body Paragraph A. Intro B. Hip hop in the main stream a. Racism, Sexism, etc. b. Use of derogatory words C. Negative effects a. On women, youth, minority groups. D. Positive effects III. Body Paragraph A. Intro B. Pop Music a. Popular music and sex, drugs, racism, etc. C. Negative effects D. Positive effects IV. Body Paragraph A. Intro B. Music’s evolution C. Negative/Positve
Thesis: Writing as art can help us in communication and expressing yourself in order to make your life more successful.
I. Introduction. - What does lead to successful life? Why communication is so important for us? (Include thesis) - Writing is one of the forms of communication. - Writing among other kinds of art. - Emphasize the importance of writing.
II. Body paragraph 1 a. Place for writing among other kinds of art. - Writing is one of main ways to save knowledge, explain historical events, etc. - Influence of some masterpieces in literature, painting on the society. b. Writing is widely used for business communication. - Art of writing letters, etc. - Research papers. c. Sum up sentences.
III. Body paragraph 2 a. Writing as a way for “self-expression”. - Songwriting, graffiti. - Introverts: writing is a great way to express their thoughts. b. Commentary/examples. c. Sum up sentences.
IV. Body paragraph 3 a. Writing has more significance than speaking. - A better way for explanations. - Helps to become more organized. - Explanation/Examples. b. Sum up sentences.
V. Body paragraph 4 a. Is still writing important for us as it was before? - Explanation/Examples. b. Sum up sentences.
VI. Conclusion: - Focus on importance of writing for learning of the young people. Consequences. . – Sum up the topic. Restate thesis.
I. Introduction. -Intro to subject -Thesis & roadmap: Judging people based solely on appearance has become a common practice in our fast-past society, but can be harmful. It can cause dangerous discrimination, and can be harmful on relationships, robbing us of
II. 1st body: racism -Historical examples of discrimination based on appearance. 1. Enslavement of African Americans 2. Discrimination against Middle Easterners after 9/11 3. Japanese internment camps
III. 2nd body: Gender based and other stereo types -Women seen as weaker, less intelligent a. Business “glass ceiling’ b. Seen as restricted by children in work environment. -Children always being suspected of shoplifting, causing trouble a.
IV. 3rd body: society -Every thing runs at a fast pace, which doesn’t give us time to get to know one another, forcing quick judgments. Ect ect yada yada -Media makes out culture focus on appearance. Makes it important. -Fear?
V. Conclusion -Restate thesis -Summary -final point.
I. intro a. Introduction about writing as a solution b. Thesis; People’s relationships are sustained by writing in this scientific age. II. 1st body paragraph a. Goodness of using a text message compare to making a call 1. Convenience -Easy -No bothering the receiver 2. Being able to express themselves by writing better than by speaking b. Information and explanation III. 2nd body paragraph a. Blog as a tool for connecting existing friends and making new friends 1. Explanation of how blog works b. Information and explanation IV. 3rd body paragraph a. Importance of writing a letter with a pen 1. When people write with a pen -Christmas -Birthday -New Year 2. Why -Hearty -Remembrance b. Information and explanation V. conclusion a. Importance of writing for connecting people b. Much writing in people’s lives c. Last thoughts
Katrina Chen p1:A memory frozen in time, captured on paper;a photo serves as reminders of the past. In some cultures it is believed that having your picture taken will reduce your life span or capture your soul, it is also taboo to take pictures of the dead. Living in the age of technology there are millions of albums at your fingertip. On the internet there is a variety of images from flowers, bird, and bees to naked celebrities. Paparazzi or photographing bounty hunters are paid top dollars for the "money shot", this could be capturing photos of public figures in compromising situation to tragedies. There is a line between making a living and invading privacy; a line photographers often don't respect. There are millions of images that may be deemed inappropriate such as a pop-up window of an intimate couple on a child's computers or a dissected human corpse. I think that access to photos should be allowed and uncensored granted the subject or next of kin consents, some images although disturbing can be served a reminder, a teaching, an art.
out line Intro and thesis: Judging a person just by his/her appearance is a double-edged sword, it’s not only hurt the person who you make a wrong judgment, but also you will suffer on the wrong judgment.
1. Defining a person just by their looking will cover the people who have real ability. a. The person who got ability is famous by their appearance. Ex. Einstein’s head style. b. It’s hard to make a friend (or have a good relationship with others) because you just defining people by appearance.
2. In many cases, you will suffer on that wrong judgment, because you simple define a people by your first view. a. when you do a business, you may use a wrong guy to manage your business. b. You will easily trust another guys.
3. You careless judging person by their out-look may destroy all their life. a. When you say something on another guy, hearsays will spread wildly.
1. Introduction a. Topic: First Glance b. ( making a visual image) While people are crossing the street, they may start to glance through the crowd coincidently and judge the people without a sound. c. Definition of judging people d. Example of positive and negative consequences (E.g. how does it affect us?) e. Thesis statement: Judging people based on there is impossible to predict their hidden personalities. 2. 1st paragraph a. Topic sentence b. Reason of why people have to judge c. By how? d. Fact (beauty not = clever; e.g Miss teen 2007 South Carolina) 3. 2nd paragraph a. Negative consequence ( lose the real talented) b. Example ( employer and employee case)/(election) c. Result (social and economic; decrease) d. Solution (beauty contest) 4. 3rd paragraph a. Negative consequence 2 ( people not united) b. Example (election) c. Result (social unrest; constant discrimination; no progress of the society) 5. Conclusion a. Bring back to the visual image b. Rephrasing the thesis statement
Miss H, sorry about the lateness of my outline and freewrite essay...it is because there are some problems with my home wireless network, which I am not able to access to the internet. Because of this, i have to wait until now, which i m in the school library, to send you my homework..... i m really sorry about that, i sincerely hope that u will accept my works and give me credit... i promoise there is no next time....
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Kelly Fitzpatrick
September 13, 2007
Free Write for Essay (Option 1)
Art seems to be a subject which causes a lot of controversy in our world. It’s strange for me to think that people can spread such strong emotions through a song, poem, or painting. Long gone are the grammar school days when making a paper cut out turkey was considered art. Art is more responsible, art has power. Art can be used for good, and art can be used for bad. What is the influence of art on modern day society? If in songs a girl is referred to as a “bitch” or a “hoe” does that have an actual affect on society? Everyone has heard of art as an inspiration, writers look to other works to create new ones, people look to poetry to release emotions, and people use movies and plays to pay tribute to people. The real question comes in when we look at how art can bring negative things into the game such as racism or sexism. Art has the power to heal, but does it also have the power to inflict pain? In my own personal opinion I would say yes. I remember growing up going to a school up the street from Brandeis, a Jewish grammar school. One day arriving to school we witnessed swastikas drawn on the cement in front of their school. Those kids had to suck it up for the day and walk passed the hate into the school. It’s hard to imagine that art can cause so many great things and at the same time inflict so much pain.
Thesis: Through analyzing music from different genres, hip-hop, pop, and oldies, the listener can decipher how music is both positive and negative to our society.
Option 3 Free Write
The racist and demeaning portrayal of Hispanic immigrants advertised on television is filled with negative and destructive stereotypes that exploit the Mexican American people; they are depicted as poor, ignorant, and illegal citizens, and so the public misconception seems to be that all Mexican’s must have jobs as: gardeners, house cleaners, or fruit pickers. The fast food chain Taco Bell has used various racial slogans within their myriad of television campaigns. One such particular and popular ad was “Run for the Border.” The other commercial featured a Mexican Chihuahua saying “Yo Quiero Taco Bell.” These fictitious and offensive images should be censored and abolished because it is biased and it oppresses the Mexican American public by deeming them inferior and uneducated. I feel that a change has to occur within the minds of the people who are watching these insulting television ads, the mass public gets brainwashed by these negative images, and so the prejudice and racism, and classism continues with turbulent repercussions of on going segregation and hatred,
Future society should be required to have a voice in banning racial propaganda from television and the advertisement world.
Thesis: The media and advertising world is to blame for the racist and twisted outlook on how Americans perceive Mexican immigrants in the U.S., legal or illegal. A change should be made, so that Hispanic groups are protected and not heckled and belittled, and that more positive images of their culture are portrayed within advertisements and the mass media.
looks good Kelly- glad to see you focus on one kind of art only. helps you be specific
I. intro
a. introduce topic; physical appearances
b. thesis; negative consequences of one's physical appearances amongst Others And themselves.
II. 1st body paragraph
a. superficiality and standards in general/society
b. pie
c. inc. at least 1 quote to support idea
III. 2nd body paragraph
a. professionalism and expectations of personal appearances
b. pie
c. inc at least 1 quote to support idea
IV. 3rd body paragraph
a. the limitations and restrictions on oneself due to negative views and the need to be accepted
b. pie
c. inc at least 1 quote
V. conclusion
a. briefly restate thesis or main ideas
b. sum it up + last thoughts
umm..I wasn't really sure how specific or broad you wanted the outline to be but I can make it more specific if necessary.
I was also wondering... do we do a partner email exchange through this blog for the review? or is that something we're going to do on monday?
stefannie's outline
I. Introduction
-general idea of prejudice
-example of prejudice
-thesis: negative consequences of judging people on their physical appearance.
II. Body paragraph 1
-topic sentence
-1st consequence: less opportunity for certain groups to express their ideas and thoughts caused by prejudice.
-example of the consequence
-sum up sentences
III. Body paragraph 2
-topic sentence
-2nd consequence: people tend to withdraw themselves from certain groups because they are paranoid of certain groups.
-example of the consequence
-sum up sentences
IV. Body paragraph 3
-topic sentence
-3rd consequence: certain people who are being prejudiced by others will feel depressed and loose their confidence which will at worst result in suicidal.
-sum up sentences
V. Conclusion
-thesis(judging people on their physical appearance is not acceptable)
-support thesis
-sum up sentence
Jorge Lozada Jr.’s Outline
Thesis:
Our society has learned to base others solely off the way they appear; although this may serve as a window to a person’s personality, it also divides our society by permanently placing us into isolated stereotype groups. [Edited; ?]
Intro
Grabby: [Begin with a crazy fact]
Intro’s Main Idea: [Include thesis in someway] and introduce small ideas that support thesis branching from…
a) What is stereotyping? Why do people do it? Why does current day society do it?
b) Positives/Negatives of stereotyping.
c) How does it divide us?
d) What will this division lead to?
1st Body: Point… Thoroughly explain “a)” questions.
- Supporting detail, real definitions. Info.
- Explanation.
2nd Body: Point… Focus on positive/negative effects. “b)”.
- Introduce both positive and negative effects. Concrete details.
- Explanation/commentary.
3rd Body: Point… Elaborate on how we become divided. “c)”
- Details. Theory. People are pushed farther apart into groups.
- How fear and hate plays in. Explanation.
4th Body: Point… Division will lead to isolation. “d)”
- Perhaps describe a divided world.
- An undivided world (conclusion maybe).
- Explanation.
Conclusion: Focus on the point of how, although we do stereotype, and although stereotyping may never truly disappear from society, we as humans should work towards our unification and the awareness of these stereotypes. (Maybe I can make this concept into another body paragraph instead, and my conclusion can be based on exactly ‘how’ this can be achieved. Or I can combine… still deciding.)
Joyce and Stef- you both show you are really learning the format for an academic argument. Well planned!!
Jeorge- stellar plan; you've thought of everything. Go for it.
Thesis option 1,art has the power to heal.
Women have been adversely affected by images in advertising. We can find healing through the same medium (the photgraphic image), as we explore and celebrate the diversity of women's beauty.
I. Intro
. introduce art work of Isis
II. Problem of stereo-types in mainstream media
A. Celebrated body types through history in art fashion and society and effects
. some profession affected
. Brown vs Topeka Board of Education
. scene from movie "Knocked UP"
B. Examples of adverse effects
.children who judge their bodies
. increases in eating disorders/ plastic surgery/ preocupation with youth
. Model in Barcelona who died
. comments made by men who judge women
. difference bewteen healthy body weight and obsessing about body image and concurrence of obesity in America
C. Isis' personal account/ and stories of her subjects
. The Beauty Myth
III. Recent changes in media/ what is beauty?
A.Experience of Isis' subjects durring and after photo shoot
.internal beauty vs. external
B. emergence of the "plus model"
.Willhelmina Plus division/ interview?
.Angelica Morton, plus model/interview?
.
C. other changes in Media
.Dove Ad campaign
."Real" people in ADs
.Body weight minimum for Models in Fasion shows
IV. Looking forward/ What I'd like to see.
. Conclusion
very interesting, Tanya. Looks well planned and powerful.
1. Art as a form of prejudice (intro)
A. types of art
a. paintings
b. songs
c. TV shows
B. effects of art
a. expressions in art (words, images, etc)
C. thesis
a. various forms of art don’t allow world peace
2. body paragraph
A. songs with derogatory terms degrade others
B. words not only degrade themselves, but others too
a. causes a continuation of using these terms
b. creates possible conflicts between people
C. elaboration
3. body paragraph
A. comedians and movies
a. makes fun of different races of their own as well as others
B. although the jokes may be funny, they hurt other people’s feelings and their own personal image
C. elaboration
4. body paragraph
A. poems with racial terms creates stronger racial opinions
B. causes racists to rally behind their opinions and thoughts
C. elaboration
5. conclusion
A. various forms of art create negativity
B. how the negativity creates conflict and affects world peace
C. restate thesis
D. final statement
Ernest Tong
Jacqueline Thanh
Option 2
– Writing as a solution – outline
Thesis: Peace can be obtained by any individual through the empowerment of the art of writing.
Introduction –
Grabber: Quote “Pen is mightier than the sword”… a sentence to emphasize the importance of writing perhaps which should be leading into three main ideas. Also how writing is often undermined of it’s power to make changes.
1st main idea) Writing is a sanctuary for truth and history. Like years of war, violence, or history gone untold but solved with writing.
2nd main idea) Writing unites. Bridging gaps between people of different walks of life, generations, etc…
3rd main idea) Writing can be the ultimate weapon to attain world peace for any individual that chooses to do so. Fit in thesis somewhere here.
1st main idea) Writing is a sanctuary for truth and history. Like years of war, violence, or history gone untold but solved with writing.
Use examples of books published like Diary of Anne Frank, Rape of Nan King, etc. Will delve into Asian American history perhaps (I think you said it has to be race related right?) and make examples out of history in correlation to writing preserving history as a solution.
2nd main idea) Writing unites. Bridging gaps between people of different walks of life, generations, etc… I will elaborate on this with examples of author Adeline Yen Mah, my experience meeting her and use a interview perhaps of how she pieced together two worlds into one in her novels Falling Leaves and Chinese Cinderella.
3rd main idea) Writing can be the ultimate weapon to attain world peace for any individual that chooses to do so. Use Iris Chang as an example, before her death her research and books published to not only record down history in it’s entirety but to attain peace for an entire generation gone silenced in the silent holocaust. Also include my experience meeting her on several occasions, the annual Rape of Nan King remembrance and group for reparations and recognition from Japanese and US government perhaps.
Conclusion: Reiterate thesis while incorporating my reflections on my own feelings about writing and how it has empowered me and individuals around me to change the world in some small unique but of course significant way.
Essay 1 Outline
I. Intro
a. Physical appearance, Different ways you can alter your appearance
b. Plays a rold in daily life [Family, friends, workplace]
c. thesis
II. Physical appearance as a negative
a. First impressions are formed based on physical appearance, not personality [?]
b. No chance to look in depth, judged on the surface
c. Restricting open-mindedness
III. Being held back by prejudice
a. Relationships [friends & otherwise]
b. Workplace [jobs/interviews]
IV. Personal experience
a. Private school [unforms]
V. Conclusion
a. Sum up everything
b. “Society stresses appearance, no chance for showing true selves”
Jaquie and Ernest- you both have well planned outlines here. I would say you are set to begin drafting.
Melanie- looks like an interesting and very in depth paper. Love the inclusion of uniforms in the discussion. Go for it
Title: Personal appearance, the business world and discrimination.
1. Topic paragraph: Personal appearance stereotypes can make you or break you in business world
1.1 Effects on small business
1.2 Effect on big business
1.3 For the good all this must change
2. What are some of the stereotypes encountered?
2.1 Positive images
2.2 Negative stereotypes
2.3 Physical attributes (race, sex, age, height, weight, etc.)
3. Reasons for Stereotypes
3.1 Jealously / envy
3.2 Differences in belief
3.3 Misunderstanding of customs
4. Specific effects of stereotypes
4.1 The employee
4.2 The client
4.3 The customer
4.4 The employer
5. Conclusion:
5.1 Opinion on how the negative effects spread from business to everywhere.
5.2 What we can do to stop it.
5.3 Closing line: It is our duty to end the damages of discrimination and work together.
Intro: (Begin with a good quote for)Music is one of the most important elements of human life.
Thesis: Music can have a variety of influences in the society, both positive and negative.
1st body paragraph:
Positive effects- Music has been proven to have a huge positive effect on people's thought and habit.
-Different kinds of music can affect people’s mood.(Find some examples for thought and habit)
-another advantage of music is music therapy.
2nd body paragraph:
Negative effects 1-
Many youths get easily influenced during adolescence. Highly influential music can create negative effects on teenagers. How the music influence youths? What are the negative effects?
(Find some examples for how the music influence youths, and explain.)
3rd body paragraph:
Negative effects 2-
The inappropriate lyrics may hurt some homosexuals and women. How the music influence homosexuals and women?
(Find some examples for how the music influences homosexuals and women, and explain why.)
Conclusion: Sum up the main point and maybe I can find some solution for those negative effects.
-classify or censor music
Purpose: To show how being prejudice can produce false beliefs.
Thesis: Due to our society hqving individuals who are prejudice, leads others to falsely misjudge and label others, such as stereotyping.
Audience: Current college students and Miss “H”.
Stereotyping in our society
I. Intro: Stereotyping in society
A. What is stereotyping
B. How stereotyping is a form of discrimination
II. Examples of what is stereotyping
1. How people misjudge you:
C. Clothing
D. Background/Past history
E. Race
III. If it’s one fault that we are stereotypical?
1. Whether it’s there fault or not (how they were raised)
F. Upbringing
G. environment
H. schools
IV. How does being stereotyped effect us
I. Unhealthy thinking
J. Can lead to violence
K. Can distract us from being who we are.
V. Solution: How can we stop discriminating one another?
L. By unlearning what we one knew
M. Give personal example
Kelly Fitzpatrick
I.Introduction
Thesis: Through analyzing music from different genres; hip-hop, pop, and oldies, the listener can decipher how music is both positive and negative to our society.
II. Body Paragraph
A. Intro
B. Hip hop in the main stream
a. Racism, Sexism, etc.
b. Use of derogatory words
C. Negative effects
a. On women, youth, minority groups.
D. Positive effects
III. Body Paragraph
A. Intro
B. Pop Music
a. Popular music and sex, drugs, racism, etc.
C. Negative effects
D. Positive effects
IV. Body Paragraph
A. Intro
B. Music’s evolution
C. Negative/Positve
V. End
A. Recap
Oksana Sema’s Outline:
Thesis: Writing as art can help us in communication and expressing yourself in order to make your life more successful.
I. Introduction.
- What does lead to successful life? Why communication is so important for us? (Include thesis)
- Writing is one of the forms of communication.
- Writing among other kinds of art.
- Emphasize the importance of writing.
II. Body paragraph 1
a. Place for writing among other kinds of art.
- Writing is one of main ways to save knowledge, explain historical events, etc.
- Influence of some masterpieces in literature, painting on the society.
b. Writing is widely used for business communication.
- Art of writing letters, etc.
- Research papers.
c. Sum up sentences.
III. Body paragraph 2
a. Writing as a way for “self-expression”.
- Songwriting, graffiti.
- Introverts: writing is a great way to express their thoughts.
b. Commentary/examples.
c. Sum up sentences.
IV. Body paragraph 3
a. Writing has more significance than speaking.
- A better way for explanations.
- Helps to become more organized.
- Explanation/Examples.
b. Sum up sentences.
V. Body paragraph 4
a. Is still writing important for us as it was before?
- Explanation/Examples.
b. Sum up sentences.
VI. Conclusion:
- Focus on importance of writing for learning of the young people. Consequences.
. – Sum up the topic. Restate thesis.
Sabrina Medrano
I. Introduction.
-Intro to subject
-Thesis & roadmap: Judging people based solely on appearance has become a common practice in our fast-past society, but can be harmful. It can cause dangerous discrimination, and can be harmful on relationships, robbing us of
II. 1st body: racism
-Historical examples of discrimination based on appearance.
1. Enslavement of African Americans
2. Discrimination against Middle Easterners after 9/11
3. Japanese internment camps
III. 2nd body: Gender based and other stereo types
-Women seen as weaker, less intelligent
a. Business “glass ceiling’
b. Seen as restricted by children in work environment.
-Children always being suspected of shoplifting, causing trouble
a.
IV. 3rd body: society
-Every thing runs at a fast pace, which doesn’t give us time to get to know one another, forcing quick judgments. Ect ect yada yada
-Media makes out culture focus on appearance. Makes it important.
-Fear?
V. Conclusion
-Restate thesis
-Summary
-final point.
I. intro
a. Introduction about writing as a solution
b. Thesis; People’s relationships are sustained by writing in this scientific age.
II. 1st body paragraph
a. Goodness of using a text message compare to making a call
1. Convenience
-Easy
-No bothering the receiver
2. Being able to express themselves by writing better than by speaking
b. Information and explanation
III. 2nd body paragraph
a. Blog as a tool for connecting existing friends and making new friends
1. Explanation of how blog works
b. Information and explanation
IV. 3rd body paragraph
a. Importance of writing a letter with a pen
1. When people write with a pen
-Christmas
-Birthday
-New Year
2. Why
-Hearty
-Remembrance
b. Information and explanation
V. conclusion
a. Importance of writing for connecting people
b. Much writing in people’s lives
c. Last thoughts
Katrina Chen
p1:A memory frozen in time, captured on paper;a photo serves as reminders of the past. In some cultures it is believed that having your picture taken will reduce your life span or capture your soul, it is also taboo to take pictures of the dead. Living in the age of technology there are millions of albums at your fingertip. On the internet there is a variety of images from flowers, bird, and bees to naked celebrities. Paparazzi or photographing bounty hunters are paid top dollars for the "money shot", this could be capturing photos of public figures in compromising situation to tragedies. There is a line between making a living and invading privacy; a line photographers often don't respect. There are millions of images that may be deemed inappropriate such as a pop-up window of an intimate couple on a child's computers or a dissected human corpse. I think that access to photos should be allowed and uncensored granted the subject or next of kin consents, some images although disturbing can be served a reminder, a teaching, an art.
P2:Black Dalia-
P3:Emitt Till
P4:Porn
Conclusion.
out line
Intro and thesis: Judging a person just by his/her appearance is a double-edged sword, it’s not only hurt the person who you make a wrong judgment, but also you will suffer on the wrong judgment.
1. Defining a person just by their looking will cover the people who have real ability.
a. The person who got ability is famous by their appearance. Ex. Einstein’s head style.
b. It’s hard to make a friend (or have a good relationship with others) because you just defining people by appearance.
2. In many cases, you will suffer on that wrong judgment, because you simple define a people by your first view.
a. when you do a business, you may use a wrong guy to manage your business.
b. You will easily trust another guys.
3. You careless judging person by their out-look may destroy all their life.
a. When you say something on another guy, hearsays will spread wildly.
Tina, just make sure your topic sentences are opinions, not facts or questions. Good start!
Wai- excellent and very fair argument. Great to see you looking at both sides!
Irela- same exact advice I gave to Tina applies to your very good plan here.
Kelly F., same comment I gave to Wai applies to you!
Oksana and Sabrina- great start. My only advice is the same I gave to Tina.
Shintaro and Katrina: looks good. Go for it.
Chan, Mary Grace
ENGL 100
Sept 16, 2007
Outline- Option 4
1. Introduction
a. Topic: First Glance
b. ( making a visual image) While people are crossing the street, they may start to glance through the crowd coincidently and judge the people without a sound.
c. Definition of judging people
d. Example of positive and negative consequences (E.g. how does it affect us?)
e. Thesis statement: Judging people based on there is impossible to predict their hidden personalities.
2. 1st paragraph
a. Topic sentence
b. Reason of why people have to judge
c. By how?
d. Fact (beauty not = clever; e.g Miss teen 2007 South Carolina)
3. 2nd paragraph
a. Negative consequence ( lose the real talented)
b. Example ( employer and employee case)/(election)
c. Result (social and economic; decrease)
d. Solution (beauty contest)
4. 3rd paragraph
a. Negative consequence 2 ( people not united)
b. Example (election)
c. Result (social unrest; constant discrimination; no progress of the society)
5. Conclusion
a. Bring back to the visual image
b. Rephrasing the thesis statement
Miss H,
sorry about the lateness of my outline and freewrite essay...it is because there are some problems with my home wireless network, which I am not able to access to the internet. Because of this, i have to wait until now, which i m in the school library, to send you my homework.....
i m really sorry about that, i sincerely hope that u will accept my works and give me credit...
i promoise there is no next time....
marygrace
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